Post by leighhe129 on Oct 20, 2012 10:15:47 GMT -5
Ancient pond stands still-
A frog breaks the calm surface.
Reverberations.
I changed furu to ancient, and ya to a hyphen in order to separate the pond from the frog, until the two are combined in the next line. I changed tobikomu to 'breaks the calm surface' in order to keep the 5-7-5 syllables of my haiku. I also added a period there in order to create a pause as the frog jumps into the pond. Finally, I chose reverberations in its own line in order to show how the frog effected the pond.
A frog breaks the calm surface.
Reverberations.
I changed furu to ancient, and ya to a hyphen in order to separate the pond from the frog, until the two are combined in the next line. I changed tobikomu to 'breaks the calm surface' in order to keep the 5-7-5 syllables of my haiku. I also added a period there in order to create a pause as the frog jumps into the pond. Finally, I chose reverberations in its own line in order to show how the frog effected the pond.